Comments for Dangerbutton http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com Where you can take a look into my wacky head... Tue, 14 Oct 2008 14:13:54 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Pathros Ascending — Prologue by dangerbutton http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/pathros-ascending-main-page/pathros-ascending-prologue/#comment-15 dangerbutton Tue, 14 Oct 2008 14:13:54 +0000 http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/?page_id=40#comment-15 huzzah, thanks for the input I'll think about that 'crap' thing. huzzah, thanks for the input
I’ll think about that ‘crap’ thing.

]]> Comment on Pathros Ascending — Prologue by Miquette Martin http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/pathros-ascending-main-page/pathros-ascending-prologue/#comment-14 Miquette Martin Wed, 08 Oct 2008 23:09:25 +0000 http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/?page_id=40#comment-14 I told you I'd read, so here I am! Good prologue. I like the use of the bolded phrases. One thing I would consider is word choice. For example "ticked off" could be replaced by one word. I also understand the significance of the word "crap," it being the only "swear" word left. However, I think it's overused a little bit. Are there other non-swear words that stuck around? Like freak or poo or something? And there's a few grammar things, but not bad! I liked it. I told you I’d read, so here I am! Good prologue. I like the use of the bolded phrases. One thing I would consider is word choice. For example “ticked off” could be replaced by one word. I also understand the significance of the word “crap,” it being the only “swear” word left. However, I think it’s overused a little bit. Are there other non-swear words that stuck around? Like freak or poo or something? And there’s a few grammar things, but not bad! I liked it.

]]> Comment on by Alyse http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/2008/07/05/27/#comment-4 Alyse Tue, 08 Jul 2008 16:47:27 +0000 http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/?p=27#comment-4 Awesome. Just plain Boysenberry. Awesome. Just plain Boysenberry.

]]> Comment on PATHROS: Setting Outline by dangerbutton http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/2008/06/30/pathros-setting-outline/#comment-3 dangerbutton Wed, 02 Jul 2008 05:05:29 +0000 http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/?p=6#comment-3 Thank you for the suggestion. As should be expected, I slept through a lot of High School chemistry... so, uh, my work is a bit shy of "hard science"... Thank you for the suggestion. As should be expected, I slept through a lot of High School chemistry… so, uh, my work is a bit shy of “hard science”…

]]> Comment on PATHROS: Setting Outline by Kirt http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/2008/06/30/pathros-setting-outline/#comment-2 Kirt Tue, 01 Jul 2008 14:07:17 +0000 http://dangerbutton.wordpress.com/?p=6#comment-2 Interesting ideas. One suggestion: Don't identify aiexyn as an element. That is a class of matter with established rules of feasibility and requires a viable place in the periodic table. It is too hard to make it jive with known science and will draw flames from chemistry/physics nerds (such as once I was)). Just describe it as a very mysterious, complex compound (like the spice on Arrakis (aka Dune)) and leave it at that. Being too detailed with chemical particulars will only get in your way. If you really want to get into chemical specifics, Ben's wife, Bryony, is a chemist and a good writer -- she might be able to offer good guidance. It might be useful, in any case, to get her ideas in general on such an interesting substance as aiexyn. (She blogs at http://www.famillewilde.blogspot.com/) Interesting ideas. One suggestion: Don’t identify aiexyn as an element. That is a class of matter with established rules of feasibility and requires a viable place in the periodic table. It is too hard to make it jive with known science and will draw flames from chemistry/physics nerds (such as once I was)). Just describe it as a very mysterious, complex compound (like the spice on Arrakis (aka Dune)) and leave it at that. Being too detailed with chemical particulars will only get in your way.

If you really want to get into chemical specifics, Ben’s wife, Bryony, is a chemist and a good writer — she might be able to offer good guidance. It might be useful, in any case, to get her ideas in general on such an interesting substance as aiexyn. (She blogs at http://www.famillewilde.blogspot.com/)

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